Let me try something

Current mood: accomplished
Category: Writing and Poetry


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I can never write a rhyme as great as you.
I can only recite lines and hope they're true.

(Let me try again)

I can never write a line as great as you.
I can only write rhymes and make them true.

(Oh wait)

I can never write a poem as great as you.
I only write rhymes I hope are true.
Is it such a crime to believe in you.

(No. OK This is it)

I can never write anything as great as you.
I can only rhyme lines I wish to come true.
I know it can't be wrong to believe in you.
How will I pass the time until I can see you.

I work, I rest, I play. repeat.
I work, I rest, I play.
Then the seconds become hours become days.
I keep waiting for tomorrow to become today.

What if I wasn't supposed to wait.
What if today is two days late.
Was I supposed to use more haste.
Instead of giving was I meant to take.

I don't think so. I'll just maintain my pace.
Well, at least I hope so. Hope I'm in the right place.
No wait. In fact I know so. It's part of having faith.
In addition to praying. I stay in God's grace.

So, I just keep on writing hoping that never ever comes.
And look foward to the day you stay; then my wait is finally done.







L.A. this was good, but you've done better and you know it, from the undecided beginning to the end. But still a sweet piece.


This is one of my previously unfinished pieces. Some of the recent poems I've put out were also previously unfinished. With this one I decided to include all the possible openings as part of the poem. So the effect is the appearance of indecision. Just trying something to give it a more real feel.


Nice!!!


I think it was sweet. I liked the appeal of indecision and vulnerability within the verses.